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Warriors fan art is back!

I have been looking through the Ultimate Guide and well I decided to re draw few illustrations whicch I did NOT personally like. I HATED how Jayfeather was illustrated so I decided to make him a better picture. WITH NORMAL eyes. The artist in the book made him look weird and creepy.... I know that he is blind but please, why did he make him have no pupils in his eyes? Well at least mine has. looks better now.

Next cats which I'll re draw
Lionblaze
Hollyleaf
Mapleshade
Dovewing

and some others
I don't like their illustrations in the book......


art (c) me
character (c) Erin Hunter


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Before I start, I saw this in my deviation stack a few hours ago and kept a mental note that I wanted to look at it later when I had more time. I could tell I liked it from just the thumbnail.
I'll start with what I feel is successful about this piece. Firstly, I quite like the color palette and the lighting effects. The eyes are gorgeous, and I also like your take on his breed being a little more maine coon that most people draw him. This also looks pretty good anatomically.
There are really only two areas that I feel fall short of what would make this a really amazing piece and they are lighting and shading on the character, and brush usage.
Your shading of the cheekbones is nicest part of the shading here, because they are harder and more defined than the rest of the shadows. It's difficult to tell where the light source is in the image, but to me it looks like its right above his head, and off to the right a bit and the shading on his muzzle, chest and the areas around his ears is very weak or missing.
wowhomedesign.net/ginger-light… this is a good reference photo to see what that would look like, although the brightness would be up to you. One or both eye sockets would be in shadow, one side of his nose, muzzle and brow would also have more defining shadows. His chin is probably about right, and I really like the whisker hairs on it, that's a really nice effect. The shading would probably be brighter on one side of his chest, and maybe even darker than you have on the other, and I would probably offset the shadow from his muzzle off to the left to match the angle of the light. I'd probably also follow the photo and shade in the left ear a little bit, probably not the top so much as the bottom.
If you would like a redline of the shading lines, I'd be happy to make something up for you.
And then there are areas that make it look as if you used a brush tool- which by itself isn't a bad way to go, but if your goal is realistic hair, there are two problems; there seems to be very little variation in the direction, which makes it look fake, and there are places where it overlays, which is sort of confusing especially since it looks as if there is no layer of highlights beside the glow-y blue ones. Those are fine, but another layer of less color saturated highlights would have really helped add to the realistic of the hair. farm6.static.flickr.com/5014/5… Hair does flow one direction, and you've got it all going the proper direction, but there's more variation, clumps, and stray hairs that what you have at the moment. You're so close already, I don't think it would take very long at all to fix this, you'd just have to do a tiny bit of painting over to get the effect you want, and you'd be able to leave your base layer of detail. The muzzle, and above the eyes are fine, it's really only the cheeks and chest that would benefit from another once over.
Overall, this is a very striking piece of fan art, and I think it's really high up there with my favorites for Jayfeather! Keep up the great work! C:
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Well.
First of all, I really love the impact and the effect of your picture. The lighting is very good and the almost magic surrounding fits the character.
What I don't like that much is the muzzle, it is a bit too long for a cat i think. You'd need to practice a bit outlining but not too much, it's good already. My tip is to create a sketch sheet.
What i Especially like is your decision to draw him pupils. I totally agree that all these drawers show him even more sick than he is. He is just blind, his eyes are normal.
The fur and grass especially is great. The grass is decent and supports the main part of the picture, the cat.

I hope i could help you a bit and thanks for this cute pic!
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DraftyCrown Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
The only thing I notice off the bat is that the eyes don't seem to be centered. That, of all things, should be easy for yinz to fix
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Ask-Lillyfur Featured By Owner May 16, 2016
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner May 16, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
No spam chain mail please.

Thank you.
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Ask-Lillyfur Featured By Owner May 16, 2016
oh ok sorry xD i thought it was funny
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner May 16, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
I got thousands of these in the past. They don't make me laugh at all. They are stupid and a waste of time. Next time if you want to comment on my art then send a normal comment not a stupid copied chain mail which is just boring.
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EvgenijBorya Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing drawing! :)
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x-XAsk-JayfeatherX-x Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOOOOOO
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Hazelfeather37 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2016  Student General Artist
yes some illstrations are poor in the book....and u cant even SEE spottedleaf....
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TheFireLordArt Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2016  Student Traditional Artist
Oh wow! This is amazing!
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Growlie26 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Gorgerrific! 
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LunarLightningStrike Featured By Owner Edited Nov 1, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is outstanding, oh my StarClan! Britney Spears OOOOOOH 
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Meew3 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2015
Really nice
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dehani Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2015
The detail on this is seriously astounding. If you drew every warrior in the series, I could die happily; this is the sort of art I wish the illustrations were like! ;w;
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank you! I am glad that you like this illustration.
and maybe, just maybe I will do an illustration for every character. depends on how I will feel about this though! :D
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masterviki Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2015
This is amazinnng!!! +fav :happybounce: 
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank you! Glad that you like it
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NeonBoneyard Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Gorgeous details! Love the glowing effect. :love:
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thanks! I love how the glow effect came out as well!
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OpalFrost Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Completely awesome! And I know, he just looks bad on the cover. You drew Jayfeather exactly as I imagined him! I really love your art!Love 
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
yeah he does so that's the reason why I made a better one for him
he deserved a better illustration than he originally got
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OpalFrost Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2015  Student Digital Artist
A much better illustration. And this one really fits for him.
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alvringer Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I just love the colors and lighting! he looks lovely here, I like the blue effect and sort of StarClan sparkle in the right corner. I saw the thhumbnail and lost it then found it again, the colours jut drew me in! You're right, blind cats still have pupils, sometimes you can't tell that they are blind until you realise that they don't react in the same way, while others just have slightly clouded eyes, but they still have pupils. He looks great :)
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
I added the blue tin and the sparkles touching him to show his connection to StarClan. I am glad that you like this piece. I very much enjoyed 'painting' this one. too bad that I did not record myself draw. I never expected this to come out so well! :D
My next one i'll record it. I'll probably draw Hollyleaf because I despise how the artist drew her in the guide. tbh many of the cats there NEED some serious re-draws.

and I agree with the pupils of blind cats looking as if thre is nothing wrong with them in some cats. my cousin has a cat who is going blind of old age. his eyes look so bright as if he saw everything but in reality he cant, maybe he is already blind. we don't know, he bumps into things, and well... kind of acts as if he cant see. has became very careful when he moves....
I hope he is well though and used to it. I really feel bad that he is becoming blind now.. poor kitty.
he is a tabby and white cat with green eyes and his name is Tiger :)
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alvringer Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You can tell it's 'StarClan' sparkle haha :) I love watching speedpaints, so I'll look out for that :D Yea there were a few cats in the guide that I thought were different to how they seemed in the books and didn't really look like their characters. I guess the artists have a lot of cats to draw, and maybe some characters they don't know as well as others so they don't turn out how the fans imagined them to be.
I don't know if you have seen the new book covers, but I really like them. I love the way the cats on them actually look like real wild cats, sometimes the ones on the old covers looked a bit like kittypets haha, really cute and fluffy but not like wildcats xD The Tigerstar on the new ones has like ragged fur and a ripped ear and looks really menacing, I think :D
Aww I'm sorry about your cousin's cat, it's so sad how some animals (and people) loose their sight or other senses in old age. And especially as he looks as though he can see, it must be very strange to see him being so careful when he walks around. I hope he will adapt to it and be able to use his other senses to help him get around :)
You won't believe this, but I have a cat like that and he's actually sleeping on my arm as I write this, and he is a tabby and white cat with green-amber eyes and his name is Tiger! :D Haha I thought that was funny, just as I read that he jumped up onto my desk xD
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Bloodwolf-Xx Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah I didn't like the illastration either. Have you seen Jayfeather on the new warriors cover for The Sight?
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
yeah I did and he looks scary! O.o
I would have made this image better if I were the artist
perhaps I re do the cover myself and show them how he should look like.
he just looks... evil there... not his type since he is grumpy not evil like wtf...
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foxwhizz Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2015
I LOVE JAYFEATHER! :D
You made him look amazing! XD
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thanks
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Streamwhisker Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2015
Oh my word this is stunning!
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
glad that you like it!
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Huskies4ever Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ITS JAY FREAKIN FEATHER!! This is so good I'm dying ;-;
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
yup! it is him indeed
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Huskies4ever Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:D :D
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ShadowedHeartsofWar Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Student Digital Artist
This is beautiful. And I agree with you on the eyes thing, and I believe on the wiki it said the eye thing was a mistake.
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank you! I am glad that you like this piece!
The eyes look weird and make him look so creepy and weird in the guide....
I really hope it was a mistake. blind cats still have pupils.... i mean wtf... pupil-less cat XD
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Catcolour Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wich program did you use for this?
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
Paint Tool Sai and Photoshop
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Catcolour Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This Looks so realistic! How did you do that?!Rage Heart 
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank you! glad that you like it
hmmm lets see


I grabbed my tablet and pen and drew it? XD
lol silly question ^^'
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TimeWarp33 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Professional General Artist
his eyes do look odd in the guide.
Awesome job Jei.
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
yes... DX

glad that you like this Kitsy!
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Nightshade-Galaxy Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful <33 you've done amazing with the with the lightning and shading.
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank you!
GLAD THAT YOU LIKE IT!
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Romeh96 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
its gorgeous :0
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
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lunilai Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Student Digital Artist
beautiful work :D I love the detail of the fur, and the blue sparkles. Absolutely stunning, and I especially like it seeing as it's my favourite character :D
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
thank you very much!
I am glad that you like this piece
Jayfeather is also one of my fav characters so I decided to make him a better illustration
More on the way :3

you can suggest me any character you want and I will draw him/her
i dont know what characters people mostly like now...
forgot.... XD
Also new series are out so.....
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lunilai Featured By Owner Edited Aug 3, 2015  Student Digital Artist
No problems :D I like to make sure awesome artists get comments and favourites instead of 1000 favourites and like, one comment.

Well my other favourite character is Blambleclaw/Bramblestar XD But honestly I like all the characters you've listed so it really depends on who you feel like drawing.
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Jei-Dinofelini Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
oh thank you!
lol i hate it when i have so little comments and many favs! i like to read comments not see how many favs i got XD

Brambleclaw/star is awesome
I'll draw him as well
-.- the artist made him look like a kitten in the Super Edition DX
he NEEDS a better picture as well. 
I'll draw him too ;3
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lunilai Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2015  Student Digital Artist
I can relate XD Just someone saying 'Beautiful' or 'i like this' means a lot more than a fave. 

I know right XD I imagine him looking quite wise, rather than a cupcake wittle kitten. Especially when he's the leader.
I can't wait to see him!
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